10-08-2003, 11:04 AM
as salam alykom mariah
It is good, only she needs to revise her spelling, besides, she stared with the question about the sun and raining. Then she lost track of this point, although it appeared as it is the core of interest in the whole story. She suddenly shifted to needing her mother's love and attention. I didn't use the vote because the options do not fit my opinion ok
But Insh a Allah she can improve